As one of the people who indicated their dislike of your RPs, I'd like to say the following:
You are most certainly more creative than me. You have created far more content than I have. Your Factbook, for example, contains far more information than mine, and it will continue to contain more information even after I finish my Factbook. It even looks better. Your Uthvaq Shanar RP contains 170 posts. Even if some of those were OOC, and each post was short, that's still a lot of content. Despite its lack of detail and events which caused me to lose interest, was certainly both fun and interesting while it lasted, due to the sheer amount of content available. You created an amazing country, Syrixia, and it shows.
You simply have a bit of difficulty putting that creativity as words. This is very common in younger and newer writers. For example, it wasn't very many years ago that I wrote at the same level as you, though with less content. It took a lot of writing at much higher levels than I was used to to get to where I am now. When I first started RPing, it was with some of the most experienced RPers I have ever met. It was because I RPed with those people that I gained such an understanding of writing, simply by imitating their different styles as well as I could, learning the strengths of those writers while gaining my own voice as a writer.
For example, two RPers who stood out were my older sister and one of her friends. My sister would create the most evil characters you will ever meet; yet, these characters were believable. They could kill thousands of people in incredibly painful ways with the snap of a finger (one of them ruled an empire, even), yet they were still the protagonists, the "good" guys, of their own stories, having their own problems, struggling through them, and prevailing. Until the end, at least, when all those horrible things caught up to them. Even then, though, they'd still fight to the end like your standard protagonist would.
The other one (we'll call him "Will", even though that's not his real name) was the most detailed, prolific writer I have ever met. At one point, he talked to me privately because he, with reason, was worried that he had too much detail in his posts. He could write a novella about making instant ramen. His posts would regularly be 2,000-3,000 words long, sometimes even longer. That was because he could go into intimate detail about absolutely everything, and then go into detail about those details.
While I never matched my sister's abilities to make fantastic characters (though a couple of characters I created were partially or even completely inspired by her), I was, at one point, able to imitate Will. During that private conversation, I told him the reason his posts were so long is because he went into so much detail, and, to prove my point, I wrote a 2,000-word post about making hot chocolate. That's it. It took me a very long time, but, by pushing myself to create and write down as many details as possible, my writing improved dramatically.
Since one of the main complaints about your writing is the lack of detail, I encourage you to do the same: Write about something simple you do every day, but remember as many details as you can about that activity, and pad that activity with those details. Keep padding it, even if you have to make some things up, until you have an insanely long post about something normally considered boring or unnoticeable, like making hot chocolate. It doesn't have to be 2,000 words (I never actually counted the words in my hot chocolate thing, so I'm likely exaggerating), but the longer it is, the better.
As well, perhaps you can flesh out that Emperor you mentioned. Even if the details of that Emperor are never used, the practice of going through and creating a believable character, despite any unbelievable atrocities, would doubtlessly improve your writing. Even Adolf Hitler was human, despite his inhuman acts. While I'm not nearly good enough at fleshing out characters as my sister, and thus can't give you any specific tips for that, the attempt, at least, would improve your characters.
Finally, I'd like to apologize for how I acted in the OOC thread you mentioned. Forcing you to jump through hoops to participate in a thread was uncalled for. Unfortunately, I am taking that RP way too seriously, and, unless I shape up, any others, especially you, who participate in that thread will suffer for it.
It's great to see everyone is here to help!
